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    dots Submission Name: The Real Medots

    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 448
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    dotsThe Real Medots

    You're killing me
    With questions sincere
    It hurts to say
    You're not here
    By my side where you belong
    With you forever
    I've waited so long
    Maybe sooner than we expect
    And I know it'll be a mess
    The blood...
    The tears...
    The shouts and the fears...
    No one can save me
    I'm in too deep
    I should just give up
    Accept defeat
    No one can help
    For the problem remains
    And I've found out
    There's no one to blame
    The black is creeping closer
    As I slowly slip away
    And I hear a voice
    Softly speak my name
    To me it says
    You have to stay
    I just turn and look away
    I want to leave
    This evil place
    Of love and hate
    And so many mistakes
    I brought you here
    So maybe you can see
    The person I am
    This is the real me...

    Submitted on 2013-10-01 20:01:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha aw what a great piece. I love long writes that have short but sweet lines. The rhyming was perfect and overall its just a great piece. Seems like youre feeling alone. But let me.tell you something. When youre alone and either hurt or happy its the best time to write. Nothing but concentration and emotion and those aee.the stepping stones to writing. Great job once again.

    No one can save me
    Im in too deep
    I should just give up
    Accept defeat

    Thats my fave part because we've all been there before. I know that feeling all too well.

    Dont be a stranger
    - kase
    | Posted on 2013-10-06 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]

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