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    dots Submission Name: what i didn't saydots
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    Author: ares_nuke_1
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    Words: 305
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
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       this is the lyrics to a song i wrote any thoughts would be appreciated as well as any criticisms


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    dotswhat i didn't saydots
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    It's 1AM and I'm alone again
    Staring at the glass on the floor
    Close the door
    and walk away again
    cause i can't do this no more

    and there's so much more to this than you and me
    and i hope that some day you will see

    that i'm sorry i didn't say what i didn't say
    but the words they cut too deep
    and these wounds i will keep
    to remind me of the pain
    from when you went away
    and i'm sorry i didn't say what i didn't say
    but the timing it wasn't right
    and i was hoping that maybe tonight
    i'd say what i should have said
    back then

    The pain still lingers
    how'd you slip through my fingers
    I guess there's some things i'll never know
    but when you go
    i hope you remember
    the feelings i didn't show

    cause there's so much more to this than you and me
    and i hope that some day you will see

    that i'm sorry i didn't say what i didn't say
    but the words they cut too deep
    and these wounds i will keep
    to remind me of the pain
    from when you went away
    and i'm sorry i didn't say what i didn't say
    but the timing it wasn't right
    and i was hoping that maybe tonight
    i'd say what i should have said
    back then

    and it's been so long since we've even been friends
    that i don't know if we'll ever be what we were again
    but i was hoping that tonight with this apology
    you could find it....that you could find it in your heart to forgive me

    because i'm sorry i didn't say what i did say but the words they cut too deep.




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