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    dots Submission Name: Blinded By Beautydots

    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBlinded By Beautydots

    Her hair flows down her neck, i follow it for miles.
    It takes me a little while, but kissing makes her smile.
    And her smile is so sweet, so bright that i wear shades.
    And her luscious lips are wet, like a rainy autumn day.
    Her body isnt perfect, its custom built for me.
    And im not perfect either, which makes us the perfect team.
    Her hands are soft and smooth, im holding onto clouds.
    Her hips curve directly into my palms, because theyre nice and round.
    Long legs like a spider, which may sound like its mean.
    But i follow them up like a nascar track, to your heart and heartfilled dreams.
    Because your heart is really the prize, id gladly risk it all.
    Your glances make my heart stop, like a standard car that stalled.
    And now im back up to your eyes, my beautiful hazel prize.
    Completely gorgeous entirely, except for all the lies.
    I could list all of the times, my attempts to love have failed.
    Youre a bitter twisted girl, on a carousel of betrayal.
    I can see through you, see your true colors.
    Inside youre ugly, and that makes us starcrossed lovers.

    Submitted on 2013-10-06 19:43:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Physical beauty can be mesmerizing but forged. Internal beauty is a joy forever and flawless. Good job.
    | Posted on 2015-04-03 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Society today demands so much of women. They need to look certain ways. Unfortunately this leads to a certain amount of superficiality because beauty on the inside isn't as highly prized a package. Often those who really look good are to self-centered to be truly pretty.

    | Posted on 2014-07-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the twist and turn on this. we have a similar ways on how we write. contradiction and contrast. its black and white. left of right. keep on writing.
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]
      Tha ending was not at all what I expected =l good job :)
    | Posted on 2013-10-07 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]

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