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    dots Submission Name: Cosmic Grinderdots

    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCosmic Grinderdots

    So vast that it has no scope
    So dark it's without hope
    Its teeth gnashing at flesh
    chewing time-space to death
    Every atom pulled apart
    Back to one at it's start

    Spec of dust on the wind
    so familiar, yet different.
    Everything tantamount
    existing without count.
    Is one the other?
    Can we really tell?
    Blood of our mother.
    We're going to hell.

    We hold what we can,
    but our skeleton's damned.
    The cold touch of disillusion.
    The end of hope the only resolution.
    All crushed in eternitys mouth
    untill eternity went and ate itself.

    Submitted on 2013-10-07 11:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this. An odd, cyclic telling of existence at large, damning itself and carrying on regardless. I usually like to add a comment about something that could use a little polish, but even after three readings I'm still not sure I would change anything. Very well done. Thank you for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-10-09 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]

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