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    dots Submission Name: Told You Sodots
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    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTold You Sodots
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    I told you so, I told you so
    You're the same as all the rest
    left me staring at the ceiling,
    A gaping hole inside my chest.

    I told you so, I told you so
    Now everything is gone
    All I wanted was your love
    But of course it was a con.

    I told you so, I told you so
    your voice rings in my head
    "I love you still," you lie to me
    Still lying in my bed.

    I told you so, I told you so
    You don't want us to change
    So stagnate my heart, it won't even start
    My feelings are out of range.

    I told you so, I told you so
    You said you wouldn't leave
    Why promise me you'll stay
    If neither you nor me can breathe?

    I told you so, I told you so
    And now you've gone away
    Just like I knew you would, you see.
    I won't beg you to stay.

    I told you so, I told you so
    I thought you might be different
    But time and time again, I'm wrong
    Emotionally illiterate.

    I told you so.




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      Beautifully/Painfully written...I enjoyed it
    | Posted on 2013-10-11 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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