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    dots Submission Name: One More Timedots
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    Author: MmR
    Elite Ratio:    5.45 - 468/442/138
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsOne More Timedots
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    ...and I'll be your punching bag
    One more time.
    Because for just one breath..
    In just one insignificant
    flitter of my retarded heart..
    I was on your mind.
    So I eagerly let you use me
    One more time.




    Submitted on 2013-10-09 01:51:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I hate myself for resembling this poem
    but in a good way :)
    | Posted on 2013-10-21 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      well that was disturbing
    | Posted on 2013-10-19 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      this write has been on my mind... i think the lines that hit the most -

    In just one insignificant
    flitter of my retarded heart..
    I was on your mind.

    mostly, I was on your mind.

    and even if it's just for a moment - you thought of me. ya know? and in the scheme of things, it's reallly not enough. but somehow in my 'retarded' heart i make it enough.

    why is that?

    anyway...

    just some more thoughts...
    | Posted on 2013-10-15 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      Arrrgh. Why is this? I have found myself here over and over again. It's like the moment I let him go, not think about him on a daily basis, not mourn the loss, move on and find a bit of myself again.... he calls. And it starts again. It's like I can't help myself.

    Anyway.... can totally relate.

    | Posted on 2013-10-10 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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