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    dots Submission Name: Strawberry (working title)dots

    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.09 - 366/363/154
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Summer is over...

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    dotsStrawberry (working title)dots

    There you lie-
    heart of summer
    And sun gilded
    Into asphalt

    Submitted on 2013-10-09 03:28:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Is this the companion to dissolve? It does seem like a lighter version of the former, but a bit less wistful and harder edged (fruit smeared and hardened into asphalt).
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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