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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The wind does not die in summer
    Nor it makes us shiver in rainy days
    It does not blow the tears off our eyes
    Nor carry our smiles away

    It gently stroke my face like your fingers
    Softly chill my cheeks like your wanting lips
    Make me cold when I open the window in the evening
    Make me hide under my blankets
    Feel the sheets of time collapse on my skin
    Where you once had
    Deep into me,dug the earth out of me
    Made me empty and light as a feather
    So the wind can take me..

    You make me fly...




    Submitted on 2013-10-09 03:44:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is awesome unquantifiable and unique in a most excellent manner
    you have as evident in all of your recent post reached a new level of artistry in your work

    I like how on a totally mundane level you have elevated
    the simplest emotions that we all share to become an innate
    spice of unforgettable significance you make me aware that
    its a blend of the smallest nuances that becomes the palate
    from which
    all the colors of our lives are drawn from.



    | Posted on 2013-10-21 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I love you as a writer and I like how you progress with your thoughts. It is simple yet profound. I like most the first stanza. Keep writing..

    -Tom
    | Posted on 2013-10-09 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! I love you!
    | Posted on 2013-10-09 00:00:00 | by yoursforever | [ Reply to This ]


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