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    dots Submission Name: Dissolve (working title)dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDissolve (working title)dots
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    the basil withers-

    it shatters in these sun scorched
    hands
    that hold you;

    ribosomes swell like the ocean-
    i lick salty foam,

    molecule
    by
    molecule

    i
    fleck
    and dis
                             solve

    on the tongue of Aphrodite-




    Submitted on 2013-10-09 10:32:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your use of salt as a description is realm interesting to me. I like this. I like what rws had to say. Other than really enjoying this unique piece I wouldn't have much to add. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-08-29 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      You seem to suggest that love is a dry husk in your hands; something with residual flavor (like salt) but nothing that can sustain health or satisfy the appetite alone. Was it your purpose to scatter the syllables as if they were pinches of ingredients?

    At least those are my thoughts on your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Sweet. I don't know why but I liked this :) maybe it was all the sciency words lol
    | Posted on 2013-10-11 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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