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    dots Submission Name: Gamesdots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 335/330/93
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Misc/Fuck it all
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    dotsGamesdots
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    This little game you play
    fucking with my head

    This longevity of pause,
    thinking of whats been said.

    Why is this my reality?
    I try and make it right.

    But I can only do for my side,
    and its not helping that you fight.

    I want to move past this
    "teenager stage"

    And move toward the real things,
    turn this page.

    But I dont know..
    if its you or me.

    I just keep feeling crazy
    And you act like you dont see.

    I have held back.
    Ive maintained control.

    But doing this daily
    has taken its toll.

    I'm not so sure
    how It'd be better loss

    reasoning is diluted,
    depending the street you cross.




    Submitted on 2013-10-09 18:33:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Thanks so much for the comments yall, sometimes it best to see it on paper and hear of others that are in the same reality.
    I honestly appreciated your feedback:)
    Denise
    | Posted on 2013-11-06 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going through a break up right now, and I very much relate to the antagonist in this piece, sadly enough. I like the images I get in the second and fourth stanzas. "longevity of pause", "teenager stage" those hit really well with me.

    This fits with what my Ex would say so well that I have to refrain from arguing with it. I really like this work, looking forward to check out some others of yours.

    Great Job, though the situation that spawned it was crappy.
    | Posted on 2013-10-16 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]
      Ive been there before.
    | Posted on 2013-10-09 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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