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    dots Submission Name: So far, so suredots

    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSo far, so suredots

    Not really my style
    to ask you in such plain words,
    to stay forever,
    and amid such instability
    be that one constant.

    And you can watch
    as the weight of the world crushes me,
    like such empty words,
    filling the gaps of silence
    so just hold me.

    And here in this naked honesty
    we may find something...
    something that in years to come
    I may write about
    with more eloquence

    Submitted on 2013-10-11 11:45:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the confessional nature of this. I also love the willingness to be and stay vulnerable.

    Nice work.
    | Posted on 2013-11-01 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes directness is all the eloquence one needs.
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww :)
    | Posted on 2013-10-11 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]

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