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    dots Submission Name: Minedots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsMinedots
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    Oh my child,
    So very beautiful
    I know you'll be
    Absolutely wonderful
    With your joy
    Comes love
    With your laughter
    Comes hope
    Hope for
    A life
    Lasting
    Fulfilling
    And Exciting.
    .....
    But now
    .....
    I sit in the corner
    On the floor
    Cursing Gods' name
    Why bring
    A child
    So beautiful
    And bright
    Into my life
    To take her away?
    To soon
    For her to understand
    To soon
    For me to let go
    Too soon
    You took her
    And she was gone.
    Before I knew
    My beautiful baby girl
    Now...
    A beautiful little angel
    My Angel
    Mine....




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