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    dots Submission Name: When the Sun Meets the Moondots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhen the Sun Meets the Moondots
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    I miss you from beyond that great bank of clouds
    that once floated closer to you than now to me.
    absence is as the world gets longer
    and dark settles like tar engulfing me whole.
    but I can hear love from some vast distance
    it comes whispered by wind brushed branches,
    and in the crumbled crunch of dry fallen leaves.

    life can be as simple
    as a tiny blue flower
    being buzzed by a bee.
    no matter how long or dark the hour
    When
    I remember your eyes and your smile
    the sun returns to play within me for a while.
    and everything fades back into view
    until the dream of a
    kiss
    meets the reality of your lips




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    | Posted on 2013-11-19 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
       I agree.. very beautiful and I love the title too.
    | Posted on 2013-11-18 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      Reality's kiss cannot match the sweetness of the dream? Or is this the inability of today's hopes to overcome yesterday's nostalgia?
    | Posted on 2013-10-12 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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