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    dots Submission Name: Already Gonedots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsAlready Gonedots
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    This chain
    Around my neck
    Does not mean
    You control me
    I am not your slut!
    I am not your slave!
    I am not your bitch!
    Please,
    I'm not even yours anymore!
    You had your chance
    Now leave me alone
    You've ticked me off
    Now we're done.
    Grow up and get over it.
    You already knew
    One day I wouldn't be yours.
    I wouldn't need you.
    Stop pretending you still care!
    Stop pretending you still want me!
    I know you don't!
    I've seen my replacement...
    I've seen through your lies...
    Yet...
    I am filled with disappointment.
    Hell,
    You should see your replacement!
    I guarantee he's better than yours.
    Get over yourself,
    I've moved on.
    You should've seen it coming
    I was already gone...




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      I dig this, well written and pissed off but not sad. You are making a statement and it almost feels political even though you wrote it about some dude.
    | Posted on 2013-10-14 00:00:00 | by nolram | [ Reply to This ]


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