Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Lone Wolfdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210/104/71
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
    Total Views: 1407
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1124



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLone Wolfdots
    -------------------------------------------


    You see her
    Without her pack
    She thinks
    I will never go back
    I've left for a reason
    I shall not return
    I can make it on my own
    So I'll never go
    Back to the ones
    I called my family
    At one point in time
    That meant a lot to me
    Now it means nothing
    But creatures to run with
    Shelter from a storm
    A mate to wake up next to
    Come the early morn'
    I'll set out on my own
    Fend for myself
    Shouldn't be hard
    I'll live like everyone else
    Lone wolf walking
    Gets a little too curious
    One day
    Too close to the lights
    She layed
    Too close to the road
    She strayed
    Too close to her fate
    She came...
    The breaks slam
    And the tires squeal
    The last things she sees
    Are the lights, so real
    The pain shoots through her
    The car has gone
    She cries out in agony
    To realize she's alone
    Poor lone wolf
    She died
    Along the side of the road...




    Submitted on 2013-10-12 23:41:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    198043

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The written by Hazy skies
    Orange written by saartha
    The Phoenetians and Us written by Torie
    Chapter written by Crestfallenman
    Hazy Half-Moon written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Still written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Inate written by MyPeriodical
    The Forgotten Umbrella written by garnet4david
    BlackBerry Bushes written by Daniel Barlow
    Forget written by Crestfallenman
    Cannot Assimilate written by Daniel Barlow
    Buried written by MyPeriodical
    motivations, eclectic. written by Daniel Barlow
    At The Bottom written by MyPeriodical
    Exult written by saartha
    being direct, it's written by Daniel Barlow
    Hurt written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Forgetting You written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Would You... written by rev.jpfadeproof
    No More Damn Love Poems written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Fizzy Love written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Blank Page written by Chelebel
    Something Spoken written by Daniel Barlow
    Dreamt written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Global Death Do Incite written by MyPeriodical
    Tidal written by OneDarkFlame92
    Summer of Peaches written by rev.jpfadeproof
    a trish poem written by Daniel Barlow
    'Cause You're Mine, I Walk the Line. written by Torie
    Collision written by rev.jpfadeproof

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry