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    dots Submission Name: Lone Wolfdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210/104/71
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
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    dotsLone Wolfdots
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    You see her
    Without her pack
    She thinks
    I will never go back
    I've left for a reason
    I shall not return
    I can make it on my own
    So I'll never go
    Back to the ones
    I called my family
    At one point in time
    That meant a lot to me
    Now it means nothing
    But creatures to run with
    Shelter from a storm
    A mate to wake up next to
    Come the early morn'
    I'll set out on my own
    Fend for myself
    Shouldn't be hard
    I'll live like everyone else
    Lone wolf walking
    Gets a little too curious
    One day
    Too close to the lights
    She layed
    Too close to the road
    She strayed
    Too close to her fate
    She came...
    The breaks slam
    And the tires squeal
    The last things she sees
    Are the lights, so real
    The pain shoots through her
    The car has gone
    She cries out in agony
    To realize she's alone
    Poor lone wolf
    She died
    Along the side of the road...




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