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The Kelpie


Author: Rhettawolf
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Class/Type: Poetry /Legend
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The Kelpie



Don't stray by the river dear.
For the kelpie be there.
Waiting for your flesh and bone to wander too near.
He may be a charming young man
with a smile so sweet, it's warming.
He'll hold out his hand
and drag you down to the depths to your death.
He may be a white horse
So beautiful with his golden saddle.
Don't climb upon his back
for he'll drag you down to drown.
The kelpie
is not beautiful.
He lows and screechs all through the 'nigh.
With his thick, dark hide
And his teeth of steel
The kelpie is a sly.
Don't stray by the river dear.
For the kelpie be there.
Waiting for your flesh and bone to wander too near.




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