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    dots Submission Name: Poisonous Heartdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.41 - 5/110/127
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsPoisonous Heartdots
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    I do not breath air,
    Rather toxins.
    Blood doesn't corse through my veins,
    Rather acid.
    Slowly killing me,
    From the inside out.
    This is the price i pay,
    The pain that must be dealt,
    For all the pain i caused you,
    And now,
    Instead of loved,
    I am hated.
    This heart is no longer normal.
    This heart of mine knows no happiness,
    No joy,
    Not even warmth.
    All it is now,
    Is my poisonous heart.




    Submitted on 2013-10-13 17:46:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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