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    dots Submission Name: this is how you lose herdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 871
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       Inspired by the book of the same title by Diaz


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    She was not your first love
    The one you carry in a secret pocket
    She won't break your heart
    Nor take a risk of taking it
    She was only passing by
    A tourist with bohemian dress
    Not to fit your liking

    So when she said "I love you"
    With aching soundwaves
    Grasped by the warm air
    Your silent breathing desolate
    She stayed calm,owning every hope
    Swirled by her parting breathes
    And that is when she learned about silence
    How it cuts like blades
    Like grass
    Like a soft breeze
    Like promises
    Like your eyes

    One of these days
    Her scent will remain in your landmark
    In every places she has been to
    She keeps in the flipping pages of her mind
    She will send you a postcard while you sip your coffee
    One ordinary morning
    And you won't see the words she said
    This is how you lose her...








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      wow. I really like this one..Ive been there one too many times and know someone who is there right now, it makes me cringe to watch it happen. nice work
    | Posted on 2014-10-10 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just a too true story
    and I so know this part of it

    And that is when she learned about silence
    How it cuts like blades
    Like grass
    Like a soft breeze
    Like promises
    Like your eyes

    Its like no other pain
    it is unique
    | Posted on 2013-10-21 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      Extremely well written. I especially like that postcard/coffee line. Makes me think about how things are lost from simple ignorance or lack of observation or selfishness.

    I really enjoyed this. I'm kind of ashamed to admit that I like this, soully because I can relate so much to the character not thinking about his actions repercussions. But anyways, damn fine work. Please continue writing.
    | Posted on 2013-10-21 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]


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