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Faery Dance

Author: Rhettawolf
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Faery Dance

Follow the trail
to a wonderful place
where no one can hurt you.
Worries dismissed.

We can be your friends
and we can dance
and play forever.
Ignore the skeletons dear.

Just take my hand,
yes that's it
wonderful, you're doing just fine!
You shall join the others.

Now dance!
Dance your worries away!
Now isn't this fun?!
Enchanting now, isn't it?

You say you want to stop?
That your mother is calling you?
But that's impossible.
You're already caught in our web.

You are falling.
We see you die.
But that's alright.
We had fun.

We will push your body aside
and wait for some more play.
For we faery folk are very eager
to dance until the full moon's done.

Say, little girl
come follow me to a beautiful place.
And you can dance until you feel like dying.
And we shove your body away.

Submitted on 2013-10-14 08:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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