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    dots Submission Name: Pierced by Your Hatedots

    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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    dotsPierced by Your Hatedots

    So this is what it feels like,
    To be unwanted.
    Fine then i'm gone,
    Without a goodbye.
    You have hurt me for the last time,
    You can't take back what you said.
    But i can assure you i will return your spear,
    Your spear of hatred.
    The exact one that you pierced me with.
    The exact one that you killed who i was with.
    And i will do this by merely leaving.
    I will give you exactly what you want,
    Then you will come crying back like always.
    But this time...
    I'm not coming back.
    This is the last time,
    You will ever see me..
    And you'll grow scared.
    You'll feel the pain you caused me when I was...
    When I was pierced by your hate.

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