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    dots Submission Name: ~The Beginning & The End~dots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 466
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       Not about anyone. Just kinda ran through my head while I was drinkin my coffee. Very very odd to think about... but its something I would do...grr


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    dots~The Beginning & The End~dots
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    It started with a simple kiss
    Never knew it would end like this
    You forced me down to my knees
    Ignoring all my cries and pleas
    You forced it in
    And instinct took hold
    This was not a smart idea
    You were very bold
    To think of me
    As your little bitch
    Bet yah didn't think
    It would end like this
    I black out and all I see
    The small space between you an me
    I look up
    I see the knife
    Gripped tightly in your hand
    I decide
    If this is my end
    I take a chance
    Bite down hard...
    Taste the blood...
    You'll bear the scars
    For every girl to see
    And to remind yourself
    Of what you did to me...
    Then I see the knife
    It comes down hard...
    Into my chest...
    Right in my heart.
    I feel my pulse begin to slow
    But I smile at you
    Because I know
    You will die
    cold...
    alone.....




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      I've been keeping up with a lot of your writings, and I must say this one is one of my favorites. Definitely keep up the good work, but never stop improving. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-10-25 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is intense. Epecially for you. The flow was great and the rhyming great as well. All in all i have nothing to pick at soooo great job! Keep em coming
    | Posted on 2013-10-15 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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