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    dots Submission Name: Societydots

    Author: Lliion
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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       I suppose it's meant to mean different things to different people. Its fairly open but mostly it's about how society views children and teenagers. Each of the verses is about a different problem.

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    people of everywhere calling
    are the children no one spoke to
    people of everywhere listen
    someone knows just what to do
    fix them

    a graveyard growing in a heart
    a chasm in a body
    a raincloud in a head
    a flower who wont unfurl

    a gnarled tree in a heart
    a shadow over a body
    an idea distorted in a head
    a flower who cant unfurl

    a broken mirror in a heart
    a crack in a body
    a twisted river in a head
    a flower that hurts to unfurl

    a smile in a heart
    a warmth in a body
    a clearing in a head
    a flower opened to us all

    people of everywhere calling
    are the children someone spoke to
    people of everywhere listen
    somebody knew just what to do
    fixed them

    people of everywhere there is silence
    the children who can no longer speak
    people of everywhere
    its too late to listen
    someone knew just what to do
    so why didnt anyone listen

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