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    dots Submission Name: Buy a Watchdots

    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    20/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 90/220/226
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBuy a Watchdots

    Time passes dreamily, each moment
    Stretching out and fading away into the next.
    Hands touch and warmth blurs across
    The room. Words are smiles, and this place
    Is illuminated for the game.
    Somewhere to be,
    Some time to get there.
    But worry about it later,
    And later still.

    The memory of promises that
    Flows from the mind and nearly
    Makes it to the lips.
    The sun that sets and open the
    Gates for the darkness to crawl out,
    Unheeded for a while now.

    Tell a white lie and stay for a while,
    Take the heat later because right now
    Is too much to miss.
    Just make the moment now last,
    Because hours from now when the
    Words are angry and the teeth
    Grind from the frustration it will
    Be too late.

    The tears that pour and the agitation
    Is something only the future will hold.
    Don’t leave yet, don’t pull away until
    The lights are off and the warmth has left
    And suddenly mistakes are clear.

    It’s late, it’s too late.
    Moments in the future are moments
    That are now. Frustration reigns
    As words are curt and short
    And the door slams behind
    A side of the bed is empty and
    Hushed words are made from phones
    Held close to the ear and behind the door.

    A white lie gone awry
    Is time wasted with jubilation
    Is left behind in aging excuses
    Until things that were going to be
    Truly become.

    Submitted on 2013-10-17 19:27:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very intense, very emotional and thought-provoking. I could easily place myself in the situation, even though I personally can't relate to anything that would make me feel this way. Well done. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-10-25 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]
      Freaking awesome! You have the gift of sight and a beautiful
    Poetic style. What worries me is you've already given up hope. In the end that's all will have left. So hold on to it.

    Love of Christ

    | Posted on 2013-10-19 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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