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    dots Submission Name: Inner Demondots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 542
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 461



    Description:
       Sooo...I was sitting in geometry today and this just came to me out of nowhere...I blame the medication.


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    dotsInner Demondots
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    The darkness inside me
    The evil it forms
    The monster within
    Monster within...

    Its tearing me apart
    Ripping up my heart
    This monster within
    Monster within...

    Its claws dig in
    Piercing
    Cutting my skin
    This monster within
    Monster within...

    Its black eyes glaring
    I can't stop staring
    At this demon within
    My Demon Within...




    Submitted on 2013-10-18 23:05:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Might I suggest continuing to work on this? I can see this easily becoming lyrics to a song that I'd definitely listen to. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-10-25 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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