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    dots Submission Name: One More Timedots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsOne More Timedots
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    Your body
    The pressure
    On mine
    Come on
    Baby
    Bite me
    One more time
    Harder now
    On the floor
    Come on
    Baby
    I want
    Some more
    It's hot
    Shirts off
    My lover looks
    In my eyes
    Whispering Baby...
    Just one more time.....




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