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Author: BlazeFlamme
ASL Info:    22/m/TX
Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23 /161 /138
Words: 153
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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You hurt me so deeply.
I follow you with longing eyes.
Too terrified to re-approach you.
Your pity console, my fear of goodbye.

I crave you completely.
I imagine your taste and smell.
Insanity circles around me.
Your slightest touch casts another spell.

I offer you my all.
Your happiness is my desire.
I would dry the rain for you.
I would set the clouds afire.

What does destiny befall?
I feel that I've done all I can.
I can only revisit this for so long.
Ambitions aside I am only a man.

I can't make this road bend.
Our paths have crossed once before.
Yet, the distance has grown untold.
Though, you're just beyond the door.

I fear that I sense the end.
Despite every effort, it might be too late.
I pray with my soul, not asking too much.
I just want to change our fate.

Submitted on 2013-10-22 17:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Its a very passionate sounding piece, and I enjoy how nicely it flows together. Kudos!
| Posted on 2013-10-26 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

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