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    dots Submission Name: Hopelessdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHopelessdots
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    You hurt me so deeply.
    I follow you with longing eyes.
    Too terrified to re-approach you.
    Your pity console, my fear of goodbye.

    I crave you completely.
    I imagine your taste and smell.
    Insanity circles around me.
    Your slightest touch casts another spell.

    I offer you my all.
    Your happiness is my desire.
    I would dry the rain for you.
    I would set the clouds afire.

    What does destiny befall?
    I feel that I've done all I can.
    I can only revisit this for so long.
    Ambitions aside I am only a man.

    I can't make this road bend.
    Our paths have crossed once before.
    Yet, the distance has grown untold.
    Though, you're just beyond the door.

    I fear that I sense the end.
    Despite every effort, it might be too late.
    I pray with my soul, not asking too much.
    I just want to change our fate.




    Submitted on 2013-10-22 17:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Its a very passionate sounding piece, and I enjoy how nicely it flows together. Kudos!
    | Posted on 2013-10-26 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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