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    dots Submission Name: Morningsdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 136/243/156
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMorningsdots
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    Why does it hurt me so much? Or better – why does it linger,
    Fermenting between the folds of my consciousness, resurrecting.
    I wake up, slowly,
    slowly to the unforgiving glare of a new day.
    and it’s not just my shoulders
    that feel discomfort
    Because the aircon has been turned too low
    And there’s no hiding from it in my small room.
    I stumble from my bed, where my body is sprawled
    Diagonally. Because I’m Russian and I like to expropriate
    all the spaces that had once been yours.




    Submitted on 2013-10-23 11:15:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This captures perfectly the groggy regret felt on a morning when you almost wish you just didn't wake up. Too tired to carry on, too stubborn to give up. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-10-25 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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