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    dots Submission Name: Waitdots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1078
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 964



    Description:
       Not completed, just the start of something I'm working on. Thinking possibly a song.


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    dotsWaitdots
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    Revelations have come on,
    Quite strong,
    Hard to ignore,
    How much I messed with ones core,
    More than a bite is gone
    Sore in blame (Yet Still),
    Take my hand,
    I'm Hoping you'll understand,
    Cause I sure can.

    Hot and Cold
    Yes than No
    In and Out
    Lost than Found
    Round and Round
    Here I go
    Complicating anything
    Even my everything

    WAIT (Baby)
    Can't you see,
    Just want you near,
    WAIT (Baby)
    Can't you see,
    It's my brain that is unclear
    and I know my actions are nuclear
    From all these fears,
    Locked up in me.
    WAIT (Baby)
    See, See your the only clear thing to me,
    So I'm on my knees
    Begging please
    Stay (another day)
    So you can see,
    What you really mean to me
    Just wait, wait,
    Baby (WAIT)




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