The Lonely Sea

Author: TheSnoitart ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53 /64 /52 Words: 102

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The Lonely Sea

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A sunset by a lonely sea I stand before eternity black waters reach for endless night and slowly now I lose my sight It stretches on forevermore the dark has finally won that war and now, at peace, we see at last the days before creation's past The night drifts on at its own pace look up and squint to see God's face He's peering down at all mankind forgetting, just for now, he's blind My hands reach out like someone's there and meet with handfuls of thin air I cry for someone's company standing beside this lonely sea

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Great poem.. I enjoyed it very much.... Desi

| Posted on 2013-11-19 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]

Perhaps infinite possibility is what made matter out of endless void and inky blackness (as opposed to some calculable law of physics). Perhaps this is why loneliness seems to rend our self assuredness leaving us craving the simplicities of companionship. Bruce

| Posted on 2013-10-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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