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The Lonely Sea

Author: TheSnoitart
ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53 /64 /52
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Lonely Sea

A sunset by a lonely sea
I stand before eternity
black waters reach for endless night
and slowly now I lose my sight

It stretches on forevermore
the dark has finally won that war
and now, at peace, we see at last
the days before creation's past

The night drifts on at its own pace
look up and squint to see God's face
He's peering down at all mankind
forgetting, just for now, he's blind

My hands reach out like someone's there
and meet with handfuls of thin air
I cry for someone's company
standing beside this lonely sea

Submitted on 2013-10-25 23:05:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Great poem.. I enjoyed it very much.... Desi
| Posted on 2013-11-19 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
  Perhaps infinite possibility is what made matter out of endless void and inky blackness (as opposed to some calculable law of physics). Perhaps this is why loneliness seems to rend our self assuredness leaving us craving the simplicities of companionship.

| Posted on 2013-10-25 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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