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    dots Submission Name: OCDdots

    Author: TheSnoitart
    ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53/64/52
    Words: 424
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    There was a while when
    everything had to be right
    everything had to be
    everything had to be
    everything had to be right.
    Had to be right.
    I'd do things
    thingy thing things
    and repeat repeat repeat repeat repeat
    myself until it was almost like a stutter
    until it was perfect.
    Had to be right.

    Then I met you
    and I wanted to do it again
    and again
    and again
    but I stopped myself for just a second
    never done that before
    and realized something.
    I didn't actually want to
    do it again
    because it was perfect the first time.

    And the time after that.
    And after that,
    and after after after after that.
    You put up with the repetition
    and the hand washing
    and even the breakdowns
    And I looked at you
    and saw
    and saw
    saw saw saw siggity-saw
    exactly what I wanted.

    So I'd kiss you
    and again
    and again
    until it was perfect
    and you'd let me
    and let me
    and let me
    and be late for me
    and let me.
    And you'd let me scream
    when you couldn't hold me
    but held me when
    you could
    you could
    you could
    you could.

    But slowly
    I saw it, I saw it, I saw saw saw saw saw
    saw saw saw saw I saw it
    you started fading.
    Getting tired of it
    the ranting
    the repeating
    the repeating
    the perfection.

    And now you're gone.
    You're with him.
    And I go home
    and wash my hands
    wash my hands wash my hands wash my hands wash my hands wash my hands
    wash my hands
    wash my hands
    and cry
    cry cry cry cry cry
    but it'll never be perfect again.

    But the worst part
    is knowing that he doesn't care
    he won't kiss you
    again and again and again
    until it's perfect.
    He won't walk back into the room
    back into the room
    back into the room
    until he sees you with a smile on
    that perfect, perfect smile
    he won't cut your sandwiches into triangles
    or give you exactly
    four scoops of ice cream.

    I was just trying to make everything
    and he doesn't make anything
    but you ended up with him, anyway.
    Doesn't it matter that I love you?
    It's not fair that you left me because
    I wanted everything to be
    for you.
    And now nothing will ever be

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