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Halloween


Author: Teofila
ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210 /104 /71
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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Work in progress....


Halloween



Witches
Wolves
And Demons
All out to prowl the street
Scaring little children
When their eyes meet
The children all pretending
They're 'imaginary' creatures
Little do they know about
The witches, wolves, and demons
They come out to play
When the moon is high
The witches start to chant
The wolves begin to howl
And the demons are reeking havoc
All across the town...




Submitted on 2013-10-27 22:13:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the way it flows. And it has a nice idea to it.
Should it be "Little do they"? And it feels unfinished. But good write.
| Posted on 2013-10-29 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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