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    dots Submission Name: Halloweendots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 846
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 486



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    dotsHalloweendots
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    Witches
    Wolves
    And Demons
    All out to prowl the street
    Scaring little children
    When their eyes meet
    The children all pretending
    They're 'imaginary' creatures
    Little do they know about
    The witches, wolves, and demons
    They come out to play
    When the moon is high
    The witches start to chant
    The wolves begin to howl
    And the demons are reeking havoc
    All across the town...




    Submitted on 2013-10-27 22:13:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the way it flows. And it has a nice idea to it.
    Should it be "Little do they"? And it feels unfinished. But good write.
    | Posted on 2013-10-29 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]


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