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    dots Submission Name: Lost Soul in Broken Eyesdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.46 - 5/116/131
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 609
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    dotsLost Soul in Broken Eyesdots
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    Look.
    Stare.
    Deep into my eyes.
    What do you see?
    Do you see a boy on the brink of crying?
    Do you see a boy that feels happiness?
    Or even,
    Do you see a boy that feels nothing?
    No pain?
    No happiness?
    That's because this boy is lost.
    This boy is gone.
    The darkness has taken him.
    It grew.
    It consumed his heart.
    He is now under there control.
    He does there bidding.
    Chained up,
    Waiting for someone to set him free.
    For someone to...
    Release his heart and bring him back,
    Back to the light.




    Submitted on 2013-10-28 19:27:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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