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    dots Submission Name: Sunday-Monday Nightdots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 412
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    dotsSunday-Monday Nightdots
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    You always seem to know
    Just how to make me feel right
    That's why I can never wait
    For the next Sunday-Monday night
    Your breath on my neck
    Drives me crazy
    The pressure of you
    Slowly kills me
    A state of death and pleasure
    Beautifully combined
    At the same time
    I will tell you now
    I am proud to say you're mine
    I just hope you know
    I don't ever want to lose you
    The day I'll leave
    Will be the day I die
    And I won't even
    Say good-bye
    I love you.




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