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Sorry


Author: Teofila
ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
Elite Ratio:    0.4 - 210 /104 /71
Words: 98
Class/Type: Poetry /Sorry
Total Views: 2654
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Description:

*sigh*


Sorry


Oh sweetheart
Please understand
I wouldn't say
I'm sorry
If I didn't mean it.
I wouldn't waste my breath
My time
My life
Trying to apologize.
Not to you.
Not to anyone.
Why go through the pain
When I can save myself the strife?
I'll watch the time go by
See how things go.
Maybe if they go well
I'll let you know.
From now on
My sweet façade is gone.
From now on
You will get nothing
Nothing but the brutal truth.
I'm sorry.
I'll say it now
Before I hurt you
Anymore than
I already have...




Submitted on 2013-10-30 20:39:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think I've been on the receiving end of a piece like this. It's definitely a bit frustrating to have to take it to that level of honesty.

This piece was a very easy read for me with very deep rooted emotions. I like how easily it flows. My favorite lines are the "why go through the pain/ when I can save myself the strife" lines.

At least this gives some fore-warning about the honesty, I didn't have such. It just started happening and was confusing. Whom ever this is intended for (if anyone) oughta feel lucky for the warming, not many get that.

But anyways, good write. The number of commas seemed distracting, but it's not big enough to incite a drastic change. These are great! Keep it up.
| Posted on 2013-11-10 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]


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