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    dots Submission Name: Sorrydots
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    Author: Teofila
    ASL Info:    17, F, with the wolves
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 210/102/70
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 959
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 712



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    dotsSorrydots
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    Oh sweetheart
    Please understand
    I wouldn't say
    I'm sorry
    If I didn't mean it.
    I wouldn't waste my breath
    My time
    My life
    Trying to apologize.
    Not to you.
    Not to anyone.
    Why go through the pain
    When I can save myself the strife?
    I'll watch the time go by
    See how things go.
    Maybe if they go well
    I'll let you know.
    From now on
    My sweet fa├žade is gone.
    From now on
    You will get nothing
    Nothing but the brutal truth.
    I'm sorry.
    I'll say it now
    Before I hurt you
    Anymore than
    I already have...




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      I think I've been on the receiving end of a piece like this. It's definitely a bit frustrating to have to take it to that level of honesty.

    This piece was a very easy read for me with very deep rooted emotions. I like how easily it flows. My favorite lines are the "why go through the pain/ when I can save myself the strife" lines.

    At least this gives some fore-warning about the honesty, I didn't have such. It just started happening and was confusing. Whom ever this is intended for (if anyone) oughta feel lucky for the warming, not many get that.

    But anyways, good write. The number of commas seemed distracting, but it's not big enough to incite a drastic change. These are great! Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2013-11-10 00:00:00 | by Zai | [ Reply to This ]


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