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    dots Submission Name: Angeldots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 5/117/132
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAngeldots
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    You there,
    Shimmering angel.
    Don't leave me.
    You're all i have.
    All i love.
    The only source..
    Source of happiness.
    Angel.
    You've kept me alive,
    Even when i'm on the brink of death.
    You've kept me happy,
    When all i wanna do is cry.
    You've made me..
    The somebody i always wanted to be.
    Angel.
    You leave me now..
    And i won't know how to live..
    How to function..
    How to exist..
    I'll be a nobody again.
    Just something that doesn't need to exist..
    Angel.
    I don't need to come home.
    I just need you to stay here.
    I don't need your warmth.
    Just need to know your warmth is there..
    I need...
    My angel..




    Submitted on 2013-10-30 20:50:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a really strong piece. It speaks volumes of pain and at the same time, strength and resilience. You can endure anything, as long as your Angel is still here. Whoever or whatever this Angel is, I'm glad you have one and I hope it stays well. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2013-11-03 00:00:00 | by TheSnoitart | [ Reply to This ]


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