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    dots Submission Name: One Moredots

    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    20/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 90/220/226
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOne Moredots

    I only need one more,
    One more sunset draped in the sultry
    Color of purpling clouds.
    Only one more kiss from the soft lips
    That long ago I adored.

    Just one more hit from the cigarette
    Poised between my finger.
    Give me another long night with
    Words that are deep and intense
    And emotions that hang on our faces
    Until we finally are quiet,
    When sleep takes us.

    It isn’t good for me,
    I only want one more.
    Then I’ll be satiated, then I’ll walk away
    And find a new muse
    I’ll find a new reason to pull my head
    From my pillow each morning.

    But I’m not done yet,
    I need that passion inside me,
    I need one last reminder that it happened
    So that when I think about the past,
    I’ll remember the sweat that poured
    And the labored breath laced
    With sweet words that
    Didn’t mean anything yet.

    Once I’m done, I’ll let the past
    Become the past and I’ll let
    Tomorrow show me where to go
    While the quiet tugging of yesterday
    Whispers in my ear and tells me that
    One more is never enough.

    Submitted on 2013-10-30 22:25:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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