I think this is an excellent poem. I'm surprised there are no comments, but I guess that is just the nature of this place. I think it's just a good place to come and quietly read or write -and we forget sometimes the goodness that comes from sharing what we think of what we've read.
Anyway, I think this has a nice depth that makes you read it over to absorb the message. It's a kind of quiet wisdom, and that is quite often the best kind.
The only thing that feels a little off-kilter to me is the dialogue section. For me it lightens the mood of the peice and breaks in at a point where you might miss the gravity of what's being expressed. It may be your intention, and if so I can see how that could be an expression of a few different things concerning our lives today and how we focus or communicate. But, I just wanted to offer my honest, immediate response.