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    dots Submission Name: Contradicted Me || part 17dots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       i'll edit it later, just sorta a drabble, had nowhere else to stash it atm.


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    dotsContradicted Me || part 17dots
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    Favoring gospels
    over solid being,
    I ask myself once or twice;

    "Believe me,
    chief,
    the howling reef!"

    If connections have purpose,
    then what breaks the strings?

    Why must we attempt catching the wind
    when we have pillars to keeps us still?




    Submitted on 2013-10-31 17:42:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this is an excellent poem. I'm surprised there are no comments, but I guess that is just the nature of this place. I think it's just a good place to come and quietly read or write -and we forget sometimes the goodness that comes from sharing what we think of what we've read.

    Anyway, I think this has a nice depth that makes you read it over to absorb the message. It's a kind of quiet wisdom, and that is quite often the best kind.

    The only thing that feels a little off-kilter to me is the dialogue section. For me it lightens the mood of the peice and breaks in at a point where you might miss the gravity of what's being expressed. It may be your intention, and if so I can see how that could be an expression of a few different things concerning our lives today and how we focus or communicate. But, I just wanted to offer my honest, immediate response.

    Thought this was a really great poem.
    | Posted on 2015-05-16 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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