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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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    dotsbrought lowdots
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    I wear my heart on my sleeve
    It makes it much easier to cleave
    I never thought it would be you
    I thought our love would win through
    I never thought you would tear me apart
    I thought hate had no place in our space
    I was wrong it's all falling down
    We are coming unbound
    The love we shared has run away scared
    I thought we would be together forever
    Just goes to show
    Love can be brought low




    Submitted on 2013-11-01 02:06:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sorry bout that but this is a good poem. I love how every line rhymed. it had a pretty good rhythm as well. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2013-11-01 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]


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