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    dots Submission Name: Despite the Raindots
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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDespite the Raindots
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    You make me doubt the thundering noise

    and I thought about you today…

    and I held you in my thoughts,

    with a bunch of other ones…

    but it left as quick as it came

    with all of my hopes that you would call

    but you didn’t

    the rain kept me company,

    yet I felt incomplete.

    the night ends early,

    while it pours outside…

    I really wanted you to call today,

    but my beckon call was not enough.

    I might have lost my touch.

    I still wait for you, even if you won’t call.




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