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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Fingerprints on glass
    Faces eagerly looking down at the trains passing by…

    I was a fool to think that you would come,
    That my thoughts were a beckon call,
    That I would see your face amid the crowd.

    Once again I managed to fool myself,
    And I can’t help but hope that you realize…
    That you take it all back…
    To forget what’s in the past…

    I can’t help myself but to be hopeful,
    I can’t help but think that tonight might be the night,
    Maybe the fog will convince you,
    Show you the path…
    Back to me…

    I believe in that
    In the magic of tonight…

    but you don’t come back…

    and you don’t call…

    Tonight, It’s just me and the fog.




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