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    dots Submission Name: How You Know The Worlddots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 419/435/131
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHow You Know The Worlddots


    the scent of beach on your skin
    will wash away

    the pink in the sky will fade to black

    changes how you understand the day

    how you know the world

    you are wistful about a shift in the wind

    reeling with the rustle of the reeds

    the power of these fleeting frames

    makes the flap of an egret’s wing
    a wave goodbye

    Submitted on 2013-11-01 22:04:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...with the understanding that
    there will be no stars

    and light will clamber
    back toward the dark

    until our souls dance
    like shimmers of flame

    in a brief plume of life
    and then comes the rain....

    Just some thoughts attached to your thoughts.

    | Posted on 2014-06-17 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      You take me back to being a child, living the moment. After experience and learning the moment is filtered. I love egrets. When I lived in Kansas, an egret visited the lake behind our house every year. Seeing that egret gave me pleasure just as your poem does. - Jim
    | Posted on 2014-05-20 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt dying love, heart wrenching but in a beautiful way.
    Beautifully broken.
    You have left it open for the reader to place their views in betweens you have carefully crafted.
    Everything fades in time as the circle is continuous.

    Again, great write /read

    | Posted on 2014-05-16 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you've captured a bit of the sadness inherent in every moment, how it ceases to be, is ever-changing. Maybe it's not the most enlightened view to be sad about it all. Maybe we should instead be embracing it, like the dalai lama says, getting rid of essentialism and embracing change. Or maybe that's something else entirely. Either way I feel like you have to acknowledge the sadness, whether one decides to move on or not. And maybe it's not sad or maybe it is. Maybe accepting that it's sad is all that's necessary. Maybe knowing is the door to sadness and happiness too. Maybe this isn't the only way to know the world. I dunno.
    | Posted on 2013-11-30 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]

    So, we're all going to hell in a hand basket. This has been a complaint amongst civilized people since time immemorial. While we're pre-agrarian on the voyeur better than a poke in the eye with a sharp stick I farmers wives. It's a sad and seemingly never ending story of decadence and debauchery, the people become secondary and social contiguity becomes mislead. mindless automatons are easier to control than belligerent anarchists. Personally I don't hardly understand how the individual rights of american constitutional fortitude have gotten us this far. There's definitely to much graft and fraud in government so we need to lose our rights. Consider what social media was to Libya and Egypt, Thats why the Chinese inhibit. I however of the ramifications of all these things don't give up. I don't know why you say good-by I say hello. Lets all get into some pandemic phatic futurity fatidics. Prolific profuseness daunts, especially when it's profound. Like get down!!!

    | Posted on 2013-11-02 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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