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Author: ForgottenGraves
ASL Info:    20, Male
Elite Ratio:    0.49 - 5 /121 /135
Words: 125
Class/Type: Poetry /You left me
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Don't freak... I'm not gone quite yet..


Seems like thats all i know,
The door closing behind someone,
Someone that'll never see again.
The abandonment of everyone around me.
Seems like something i can't avoid.
I turn.
No matter who it is.
Whether it be my mom..
Running away to another state.
Or my best friend..
Trying to off himself,
Because of what i said...
Maybe even the worst of all.
The love of my life,
Gone in an instant..
Leaving is all i know..
Guess people don't trust me..
I'm not really wanted by them in the first place.
Go figure.
Nobodies never are.
I merely exist to be tormented,
Tormented by lack of care..
Lack of trust..
Well fine.
I guess i've got some leaving to do.

Submitted on 2013-11-01 23:27:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  At first glance, I didn't really like this. Possibly because I enjoy a more superfluous style. Possibly because its so depressing.

But danggg, it is beautiful in a simple way. Filled with ache. Its honest and to the point, and I love it so much.

Maybe because I can relate. Excellent write. Glad I read it. Thanks for sharing something so personal.

And my absolute favorite part is the last couple of lines.

Wretchedly beautiful. Eerie in its simplicity.
| Posted on 2013-11-06 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

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