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    dots Submission Name: Leavingdots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.45 - 5/115/130
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 537
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 876



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       Don't freak... I'm not gone quite yet..


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    dotsLeavingdots
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    Seems like thats all i know,
    The door closing behind someone,
    Someone that'll never see again.
    The abandonment of everyone around me.
    Seems like something i can't avoid.
    I turn.
    Gone.
    No matter who it is.
    Whether it be my mom..
    Running away to another state.
    Or my best friend..
    Trying to off himself,
    Because of what i said...
    Maybe even the worst of all.
    The love of my life,
    Gone in an instant..
    Leaving is all i know..
    Guess people don't trust me..
    Or.
    I'm not really wanted by them in the first place.
    Go figure.
    Nobodies never are.
    I merely exist to be tormented,
    Tormented by lack of care..
    Lack of trust..
    Well fine.
    I guess i've got some leaving to do.




    Submitted on 2013-11-01 23:27:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      At first glance, I didn't really like this. Possibly because I enjoy a more superfluous style. Possibly because its so depressing.

    But danggg, it is beautiful in a simple way. Filled with ache. Its honest and to the point, and I love it so much.

    Maybe because I can relate. Excellent write. Glad I read it. Thanks for sharing something so personal.

    And my absolute favorite part is the last couple of lines.

    Wretchedly beautiful. Eerie in its simplicity.
    | Posted on 2013-11-06 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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