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    dots Submission Name: Understanding the Unknowndots
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    Author: ForgottenGraves
    ASL Info:    20, Male
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 5/118/134
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsUnderstanding the Unknowndots
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    I saw it..
    And it scares me.
    I saw it..
    And it worries me.
    I saw it..
    And now I'm concerned.
    Concerned for you.
    I looked into your eyes..
    And they told me everything.
    Your eyes scream for help.
    But your body says stay away.
    Your heart begs for an escape,
    But your brain has chained it away.
    Then..
    There's me.
    I try again.
    And again..
    But you won't let me help you..
    You've been told I am not the one..
    The one to save you..
    Even though..
    I can give you everything you want..
    But I can't do anything,
    Even though I know..
    I understand..
    Understand the Unknown.




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