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    dots Submission Name: Practicalitydots
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    Author: Zai
    ASL Info:    24/m/US
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 66/145/98
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
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       Im not sure what's going on with me. I'm so angry that I have what I have. I'm angry that I'm fortunate, I think God made a mistake when he put me where I am. How am I ever going to make this life work? Ugh.


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    I don't deserve the comfort of warmth.
    I don't deserve the luxury of home.
    Not the gifts from charity.
    Not the power of friendship.
    The cloths on my back.
    The music I hear.
    The food in my pantry.
    I dont deserve my place in life.

    But I have them.
    But I want them.
    But I haven't done anything for them.
    But I have them.

    It's disgusting, what a waste.
    That I would have a fireplace
    To lean back and warm my feet.
    Such a dispicable disgrace
    To which I've nearly lost my faith.
    Life is clearly not a race,
    So why while I'm so sincerely stated
    Do my eyes feel so irritated?
    This is not where I am fated.
    Am I really this overrated?
    Do I deserve what I have tasted?

    Hardly,
    but I have this:
    A myriad of options.
    A dreary sad concoction
    With an over stated problem,
    Or a clearly better notion
    To switch from this self loathing
    To the effortlessness of floating
    Between bloating and gloating
    Between the size of my emoting
    and my ever growing boredom.
    I'm pretty sure I'm selfish
    To the point of no return.
    With my emotions hellish,
    To whom do I direct the burn?





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    ||| Comments |||
      There are still people who have more and who have less...just be grateful for what you have...some people don't have a stable family while others do but I bet the ones who have a stable family have other things to worry about like money or other things maybe. Don't take your life for granted...it could be gone in the blink of an eye.
    Love,
    Tay
    PS if you need to let out some anger I'm here and if you want me to delete this comment just tell me to and I will.
    | Posted on 2013-11-09 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      Just think, with your affluence you have more leisure to pursue trying to make the world a better place. There are many who don't deserve to live. Let's keep the wild lilies free.

    Bruce

    PS: I realize that as humans we have almost no metaphysical mystique with which to attempt this extrapolation but we can dream can't we?
    | Posted on 2013-11-03 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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