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Fear of Dreaming


Author: TheSnoitart
ASL Info:    19/ M/ USA
Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 53 /64 /52
Words: 55
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Fear of Dreaming



I fell asleep
with the words of a dying poem
on my lips.

That bittersweet kiss carried me
to a half-finished life
and nothing to say.
Now, my message forgotten
I stare at this glass cage
and pace these broken corridors
and wonder why
I cant (don't want to) remember
how it ends.




Submitted on 2013-11-04 12:32:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a beautiful piece. Good job and keep writing!
| Posted on 2013-11-04 00:00:00 | by Rhettawolf | [ Reply to This ]


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